"I'm not loving your topic sentence."
- "They ignored your first ten. What makes you think you'll do any better with these?"
Submitted by Bob Silverstein, Scarsdale, N.Y. - "Dear ... diary ... She's ... finally ... asleep.... Oops."
Submitted by William DiDio, White Plains, N.Y. - "It needs a feisty female detective."
Submitted by Lee Neville, Niagara Falls, N.Y.